Friday, October 1, 2010

Writing Workshop 10.1.10

We had such a good time today during our Writing Workshop!  We played a fun game called "Where am I?"  Each group wrote a vivid description of a specific setting after filling in a Sensory Word Bank in Google docs (see below).  Then we shared our writing on Edmodo to see if everyone could guess our setting-- some examples are below. Excellent writing, guys! I'm already looking forward to our next Writing Workshop.


Football game:
4D: 
As I walk into the stadium the sound of crackerling popcorn fills my ears. As I sit down in my chair I feel the gum under the chair. While I watch the sport I see the beads of sweat falling off the man's face. I can smell the strong scent of caromel crackerjack. I the sweet taste of buttery popcorn. We can hear the sreams of the people in the crowd. Finnally the game is over.
4C:
I here the sound of the crowd yelling when I enter the staduim. I taste the hot sweet taste of funnel cake. I feel the cold metal seats when I sit down. I smell the sweet smell of cotton candy. I hear the colition of helments.


Circus:
4D:
As I walk into the crowd, I can hear the roar of the tigers and lions. When I sit down, I can smell the sweet flavor of cotton candy and the warmness of the funnel cakes. I love to see the wacky dressed men run into walls. As I hear the gray animals sounding their trumpets, I can feel the exitement in the crowd. I love the people yelling having a good time while I smell pies smashed into faces. The wacky music started to play, and I was even more exited. Now the fun has just begun!
4C:
As I walk into a huge arena I smell salty popcorn, and sweet cotton candy. I smell gas from motorcycles and other stunt machienes.I taste juciey hot dogs and hamburgers. I see people on durt bikes doing stunts and flips. I see funny men playing jokes on people. As I sniff the air I smell delicious foods. I hear a announcer introducing a show as he shouts the faumous 'ladies and gentelmen' theme.


Birthday party:
4D:
As we walked in to the backyard we heard the ripping of wraping paper, the yelling of kids on the bounce house,and we here a speicial song. We see kids shovling down ice cream and the flame of the lighter. The scent of the smoke of the lighter and the sweet scent of candy. We taste the ice cream in our mouths. We feel the sticky spoon in our hands.
Mall:
4D:
When I walk down the escalator I can hear the people chattering. I can hear the cha ching of the cash registers. I can see clothes in each and every bag. I smell the new leather shoes. I smell the strong scent of coffee. I can feel the fabric of new clothes. That is how my day was.


Grocery store:
4C:
I hear shrieking of a woman saying"but I love this dress". The taste of crunchy and salty rotisery chicken in my mouth. I feel the cold hard surface of the marble an the floor. Two little girls having a smackdown over shoes.
4D:
I hear the beeps of the price scanner, I sense the begging of children, as I walk in I can hear the sliding of the automatic doors.I see children roaming around, I watch people giving their money to the clerk,
I smell the scent of old spices, I smell the aroma of honey roasted peanuts, I sniff the scent of cookies being sampled. I taste the sweetness of sampled brownies, I taste the saltyness of sunflower seeds.
I feel the roughness of the money as I give it to the clerk, I glide my hand across the smooth peelings of an apple.

4C:
I trot into the glass doors that led to the wonderful islels that have the condiments on them. As I walk down that isle I hear the wheels on the floor go clickity clackity. I see the wonderful frozen popsicles and ice cream, and I feel the chills of the frozen section.



SENSORY WORD BANK


What do you hear?

What do you see?

What do you smell?

What do you taste?

What can you touch/feel?

23 comments:

Michael said...

I learned how to identify by hearing then imagining the things he said and say what it looks like to me.

David said...

I learned how to identify things by listening, smelling, feeling, tasting, and seeing.

Ethan said...

I like the onamodapia on the Birthday Party from 4D ,and it was the cha ching sound of the cash register.

Walker said...

I really liked 4C description of the football game because they made it clear that it was a football game.

Michael said...

I learned how to identify by listining then imagining what he said and tell what it looked like to me.

Buzz said...

I like 4D circus because it was so wackey. The discription had lots of details. I like it when it tells you about the clowns, and when it tells you people smashing pies n peoples faces.

Will said...

I like the detail of 4D's football game because they said," I can see the beads of sweat falling off the man's face".

Will said...

I like the detail of 4D's football game because they said," I can see the beads of sweat falling off the man's face".

Michael said...

I learned how to identify by listining then imagining what he said and tell what it looked like to me.

Thomas said...

I love 4C's football game because they don't tell you what kind of game but they give you a good hint. I really like 4D's birthday party because if they didn't give any of those excellent context clues then you would probably think it is something else. I like 4Cs and 4Ds circus's because it makes me want to eat that salty popcorn and the sweet flavor of cotton candy.

Liam said...

I liked 4-c's mall paragrph. I liked it because in the paragraph it said how the cash registers opend by saying cha-ching. I also liked 4-D's grocery store paragraph; I liked how they described the sliding doors,the beeps of the price scanner, and and the sense of begging children.

Jack said...

I learned that describing helps a lot especalily when your writing a story, and I especily like 4D's circus it had a lot of decsription and detail. l also liked everyones too.

Houston said...

I like how 4C describes the football stadium when you mentioned the "colition of helmets" and the "cold metal seats". I think you have great vocabulary in writing your paragraph!

Ev said...

I learned that I could describe places and things by using your scenes,and I liked the grocery store group in 4D because they used ada moda peay.

Jim said...

I learned how to make a visual paragraph. It was fun!

Jim said...

I learned how to make a visual paragraph. It was fun!

Ryan said...

I like 4C and 4D's football game because It makes me feel like I'm really there. I learned that when you write stories you never have to use the main idea.

Philip said...

I learned how to use words without just saying the real word. I will use this for when I get older and right now. I love it!

JoJo said...

I liked the 4c football game alot it mad me seem like I was actually at a Titans game (my favorite team). My favorite part of it was the cotton candy I love cotton candy at the footbal games.

Lee said...

I really like how 4D discribed the football game. It had great strong discrption like whe they said the gum under the chairs. also when they scented caromel crackerack. The beads of sweat help me understand how hard he must be playing. One of the best parts are the buttery popcorn taste. That is a amazing way to write a discription

Matt said...

We had a lot of fun doing that! I love doing that because it helps me with my writing. When we did 'Where am I' that acutly blew my brain, but I worked with my team and we did good.

Matt said...

We had a lot of fun doing that! I love doing that because it helps me with my writing. When we did 'Where am I' that acutly blew my brain, but I worked with my team and we did good.

Griff said...

Our class had a great time when we where in Writeing Workshope! We put our writing on Edmodo for everyone
to see. But before we stared we played a game and it was called Where am I, so it will help us with it. It was really fun! I want to do a Whiteing Workshop!