Wednesday, March 23, 2011
Writing Workshop: Getting Rid of Nothing Adverbs
Today in our writing workshop we focused on replacing "nothing" adverbs and verbs (adverbs and verbs that don't add anything to the description) with stronger and more powerful adverb/verb pairs. We used our writing folders and thesaurus as resources, and our sentences definitely improved! Here are some examples:
At the dog show, the judges looked carefully at every dog.
At the dog show, the judges squinted aggressively at every dog.
At the dog show, the judges attentively inspected every dog.
The German shepherd walked very slowly around the ring.
The German shepherd coasted extremly sluggishly around the ring.
The bulky German Shepherd swiftly trotted around the ring.
The dalmatian jumped easily onto the chair.
The dalmatian pounced lackadaisicly onto the chair.
The dalmation bounded effortlessly onto the chair.
After waking up, the golden retriever was hungry and quickly ate his food.
After waking up, the golden retriever was hungry and viciously munched on his food.
After violently waking up, the golden retriever was starving and quickly chomped on his food.
After waking up, the golden retriever was hungry and instantaneously demolished his food.
Sitting on a girl’s lap, the Chihuahua slept very soundly.
Sitting on a girl’s lap the chihuahua slumbered extremely soundly.
Sitting on a girl’s lap, the Chihuahua catnapped very nicely.
Posted by Courtney Humphreys at 12:22 PM